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The flag was blue with red and white stripes streaked in a cross and an "X."

"I got your flag, Arthur…" you murmured hoping no one could hear your heart throbbing in your chest. You had a crush on the handsome British stud ever since you met him in high school. Now that the two of your had graduated and gone off to college, you both had gone on your separate ways. During a little high school reunion, however, Arthur's friend, Alfred, had proposed that everyone play a little "seven minutes in heaven" to spice up the reunion.

"Dude, you lucky dog!" Alfred laughed and slapped Arthur hard on his back. "You get to do it with __________! Why don't I just help you guys inside? You know, to break the ice?"

Before either one of you could protest, Alfred and Arthur's arch nemesis, Francis, had shoved you and Arthur inside of the closet and locked the door behind them. It was dark and cramped, not exactly the best place or the best situation to confess your feelings for your crush.

"Well, this is certainly awkward…" you heard Arthur sigh from barely a few centimeters away from you. "___________, you'll have to forgive Alfred for doing this. I know he can be a bit of a hassle sometimes, but—"

"Arthur, I like you," you suddenly blurted out.

There was a momentous pause.

"What?" you heard Arthur say.

Thank goodness it was dark. You didn't want him seeing your face. It was probably beet-red by now.

"I said I like you, Arthur," you repeated. "I always have—ever since high school."

"Oh…uh…" Arthur didn't sound like he was prepared for this.

Oh, crap, I knew it, you miserably thought. It was a long shot, anyway.

"Look, I'm sorry for saying that out of the blue," you quickly apologized. "I just didn't think we'd get another moment like this and I'd never get another chance. I've just wanted you let you know how I've felt about you all of this time."

"___________...?" Arthur murmured.

"Yes?" you responded.

"I…I like you, too," you heard him reluctantly say. "I've always thought there was something different about you. Even though I can't exactly say what that quality is, I still find something fascinating about you."

Now you were positive your face was steaming red. This was the best day of your life.

"Oh, Arthur…" you breathed. "That makes me so happy…"

You could hear Arthur shift uncomfortably in the darkness.

"N-Now that we both know we like each other," he stammered, "should we…you know…? We still have a few minutes left…"

You could feel your cheeks growing hotter and hotter, your heart now beating like you had just run a marathon.

"R-Really?" you babbled. "You mean it?"

Arthur chuckled. He always sounded cute when he did that. "If that's alright with you, love."

He used that word on me! you squealed in your head. You had thought it was a common thing to hear an Englishman use the word "love" to address women they were fond of, but you hadn't heard Arthur say it until now.

"Oh, Arthur, that's completely alright with m—"

CRASH!

You don't know how in the world it all happened, but somehow, against all odds, a large truck had blasted its way into the closet through the foundation and hit you straight on the head causing you to black out.

"…"

"…____________...."

"__________..."

"__________?"

"Huh?"

When you opened your eyes, you were enveloped in a bright white light surrounding you with heavenly choir music in the background.

You looked around. The splitting ache on your forehead didn't hurt anymore. "Am I…? Am I…dead?"

"____________," you heard a voice say. You moved your head to the source of the voice and saw what appeared to be Arthur with a white robe and angelic wings.

"A-Arthur?" you stammered. "Is that really you? Wait—How in the world are you flying like that? Where are we?"

You watched as Arthur flew down and knelt beside you.

"We're in heaven, ___________," he said in a calm voice. "A truck hit you on your head costing you your life—as it did mine. But don't worry. Now we can finally live the rest of eternity side by side. It doesn't have to be seven minutes anymore. It doesn't have to be in a closet—unless you want it to be. We can be together whenever we want, wherever we want."

"What? So we're really dead?" you asked. This was all very weird. "B-But there was so much more I wanted to do, so many places to visit, and a full life ahead of me…"

Arthur looked displeased. "You'd have second thoughts of being the eternal lover of an angel until the end of time? Even though he is the person you've had strong feelings for ever since you laid eyes on him?"

You burst out laughing. "Are you kidding me? There's no way I'd give up an opportunity like this."

And until the end of time or whatever it is people call it, you and Arthur had as many seven-minute sessions in heaven whenever you felt like it. The end.
This is stupid and I know it.

For those of you who know about how I feel about reader-inserts, you'll know why I wrote it like this. I don't understand why seven minutes in heaven stories are so popular. They're redundant as *beep* and yet they constantly make it to the front page making the rest of the reader-insert side of the fanbase look pathetic. They aren't even fun to write. I had a few laughs out of this, though.

Axis Powers: Hetalia and its characters belong to Himaruya Hidekazu.
This story belongs to me, *GydroZMaa.
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AnaisseSteighart Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
dafrik?this is so much awesome
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HetaliaF4ngirl Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013
This was unique, but I have to say I like it. I love all Hetalia fanfiction stories, over used and unique. The ending was incredibly sad, but it's what seperated your story from everyone else's. I find that a good asset. Stories like Romeo and Juliet are longtime romantic classics because of their dedication to love. Lots of stories these days all deal with perfect endings...which are fine, of course. But I find it sweet to change things up a bit. So, all in all, I really did like this.
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GydroZMaa Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, that was certainly a different take than what other people have said. Thank you for enjoying this. 
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HetaliaF4ngirl Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013
Oh, no problem! It was unique, the good unique. As I said, I love cheesy fan fic stories, but we need ones like these to change it up. Keep up the good work!
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Sushi-Cutie Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is terribly sad. I don't know why you dislike 7 minute stories, they're wonderful.^^ They're cute and romantic and simple. They don't have to be full length stories to catch attention. They're often short, sweet, and filled with all the fluff you'd have to wait to get in a normal story. I think they're well worth making. Maybe you need to change your perspective and be a bit more open. But this is simply my opinion. Big things come in small packages. And no matter what shape or form, beauty can be found anywhere and everywhere. And I think that seven minutes stories shine with just as much beauty and worthiness as any other story.^^ Also, they're just plain out fun.^^ I love the rush I get reading them. Plus, lots of people play seven minutes, so it's relatable. People like relatable stories that make the whole experience seem more real to them. Fantasies are fulfilled, and the reader is at peace. Personally, I find them exciting and sexy.^^ I've never played such a game, it's so daring~ So I guess I like that others do what I can not to balance it out. I like to see what will happen in certain instances if I was there. Being with a character alone in a closet while playing such an infamous game, it's so embarrassing~ And also bold and courageous!^o^
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GydroZMaa Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
If you knew me based on my stories, then you'd know that I'm not a strong advocator of spontaneous fan-service, fluff, and cheap redundancy.
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AnaisseSteighart Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
True,I also hate those those fan-services. I agree with you
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GydroZMaa Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ugh, the person who made the parent comment is so obnoxious, giving me that crap about making "everyone happy." I'd like to see her try.
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Sushi-Cutie Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I don't ask people to read my stories or comment or watch me or give me llamas. They do it because they like my stories. And I wanted to share with you an outside opinion, which you can't seem to handle. If you continue being so narrow-minded then your writing will always be amateur. It's that type of thinking that causes people to lose favor. I don't know why you have to take everything so negatively. And if you think I'm some tree-hugging good two shoes, then obviously we're not talking about the same person. I try to be nice when I comment to avoid any kind of conflict, but I love to be as blunt as possible because the truth is, I'm not that nice. I'm not the type to cry myself at sleep at night wondering why some person on the internet doesn't like me. I'd sooner pistol-whip you until you get some sense into your head. Now, if there's something you want to ask me, then go ahead. But I don't waste MY time commenting on OTHER people's stories to hear crap about 'I'm not going to listen to the reader's opinion, since if you don't like my stories, there must be something wrong with you'. You need to pull your head out of your uptight hindquarters and remove the foot from your big mouth. 'Obnoxious', am I? Sure, maybe to someone who doesn't listen. But if you take any VALUE out of my comments, then maybe you'd get it. I've met people like you, people who don't understand the meaning of my words. And I can see that I obviously can't reach EVERYONE with common sense, but I can at least try. I try to save and support good authors. And I don't really care if you call me names to my face, but gossiping about me to another person is just plain pathetic. You'd like to see me try? And you can't call me names to my face? What are you, scared? Are you too scared to say those things to my face? Come one, let it all out, then. I WISH you'd be more honest with your thoughts, since you weren't when you were speaking to me, but you are when you can cower behind another person, eh? I'd like to hear your true thoughts. And if you don't want to cooperate, then fine. You're not willing to improve, then fine. I credit those who can put up with me and those who can improve from my words. I'm not some noob who thinks she knows all. And I DO appeal to many people. I wouldn't have so many friends if I was narrow-minded. I'm open and all of my friends I earned one by one through me giving you the EXACT same speech I give you now, and my stories. I even had to fight some of them first. And I don't want to give up on you, because from the way I see it, you could be so much better, but your opinionated and close-minded attitude is definitely holding you back and I can't stand to see such great potential go to waste. Because even if you're decent now, you'll never improve much this way. I don't know where you get your attitude or why I can see I giant stick sticking out of your crack, but you should try and listen to other people a little more, because even if you don't agree, you might learn something new to help you improve. Instead of doing this right now, I could be off doing better things or helping you improve. But because you refuse to talk to me, I have to do it this way. If you have something to say, can we speak like adults or are we going to play the 'go run away and hide' game and avoid the subject? Because whatever you choose proves how loyal you are to your stories, and I will be sure to let everyone know if you've improved or not. No one likes to see a person with an attitude like you. People have admitted to me that they're much better do to my encouragement and words. People actually come to me to evaluate their stories, now. And people I don't even know and who don't know me know the value of my words. And they tell their friends and then I make even more friends and we all help each other out. We don't have to be all buddy-buddy, but I want us to understand each other more. Even though I'm blunt and honest and annoying and as you put it, 'obnoxious' (I will give you that one if it makes you happy), I just want you to improve and not be so cut off from people. I don't care if you continue to hate certain types of stories, but at least show some respect for the people who write them and those of use who read them. I hate yaoi, but I have friends who love it and friends who write it. We are able to reach a middle ground, even though I despise it at times. If you do indeed take my advice, I would be MORE than happy to recommend you to my plethora of friends, as you would then be one of our group. But if you choose to not reply, I simply hope that you can at least gain some insight from what I've said. And whatever you say can be plastered on display in a journal for everyone to see.^^ I am more than ready to recommend writers who I find absolutely commendable, and honest and brutal to list ones who don't. I'm a bit of a sadist, you see.^O^ But I'm not threatening you, and I hope it doesn't come off that way. I'm just saying what I think. Come on you tsundere! Let's work together! Come one, just a shot! What doesn't kill you makes you stronger, eh? I wanna see you do well so I can tell all of my friends how proud of you I am! I'm jumping with excitement as it is. It would be unfortunate if we couldn't get along even once.
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GydroZMaa Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my goodness. After taking the time to read your invested comment, I've been doing some thinking, and you know what? You're right. It was very rude of me to criticize you from a chain comment, and if I really wanted to discuss something, I should have done it with you personally. I sincerely apologize for my rash actions. Judging by how much you're willing to put up with me, I should give you another chance at helping me become a better writer. If you have some constructive criticism on how to reach out to this community, feel free to offer me some on my later works.

Also, if being able to expand to a large community of friends is what you're capable of, then please don't hesitate to introduce me to anyone who isn't familiar with my works. I'd like their opinions, too, if that will help me get a better grasp of the community as a whole. I have been quite closed-minded mainly because I originally joined this site to post works that I wrote out of enjoyment, but if others enjoy the works that I put out, that makes things good for everyone, doesn't it? 

You are obviously more well-versed in these matters than I am, so I humbly encourage you to help me improve wherever I need improving. I hope we can make amends and renew our relationship. 
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